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The chart below gives information on the precentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. write at least 150 words

The chart below gives information on the precentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. write at least 150 words
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The provided bar chart illustrates the
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 distribution of charitable donations among British individuals from approximately 1990 to 2010.
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, there was a remarkable increase in the proportion of British people contributing to charity across all
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groups
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 in 2010.
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, there was a notable decline of 35% among those aged 65 and above.
In contrast
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, the data for 1990 shows a more fluctuating trend in charitable giving across different
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groups
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. Notably, the youngest
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 group in 1990 exhibited a higher percentage of charitable donations compared to their counterparts in 2010. In 1990, the
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 group of 36 to 50 years old had the highest percentage of charitable donors in the UK.
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, the older
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 group of 18 to 25 years old contributed the lowest percentage, around 18%.
However
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, by 2010, there was a significant increase in charitable donations across four different
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groups
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,
although
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 there was a slight decrease among those aged 65 and above. In summary,
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 there was a substantial
overall
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 increase in charitable giving among British people in 2010 compared to around 1990, there were
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 variations observed across different
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groups
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 in both years
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, groups with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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