The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to Japan for different purposes between 1990 and 2010.
A glance at the line graph provided reveals the tourists of foreigns who came to Japan for various purposes after two decades.
Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is evident that there was a downward trend experienced in all intentions. Moreover
, the number of businesses was the highest number over the 20-year.
In terms of business’s
data, it started at approximately 6 Change noun form
business
million
and rose dramatically just
10 Change preposition
to just
million
by 2005. Although
it exponential decline, it gradually increased and reached 9 million
in the last
year.
With regard to holiday and visit
friend information , there was a slight movement underwent in both purposes, except for the initial point and the growth level. In 1990, the figures for holiday and visit
friends began at about 5 million
as well as
merely 4 million
respectively. What is more, there were similar points in about 1993 and in 2005 between holiday and visit
friends stood at 4 million
and about 7 million
equivalently. Finally
, Whilst holidays took up the second rank with negligibly 7 million
, the visit
friends decreased minimally at
6 Change preposition
to
million
in 2010.Submitted by thvana236 on
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