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Some workers must work at night. What are the advantages and disadvantages of night-shift work? Give reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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These days,
midnight
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the midnight
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shift
 is famous around the world
due to
 the financial crisis.
However
, some
employess
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employees
employers
 do not have
thr
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the
 chance to ignore the
night
 job,
therefore
, they must be worked. There some advantages and disadvantages
are in
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to
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these phenomenon
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this phenomenon
these phenomena
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 and I will discuss
it
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them
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 briefly
for
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in
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 the
foregoing
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following
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 paragraphs. There are some benefits
are
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apply
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that
stimulated
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stimulate
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this
 situation. One of the main advantages is that the workers who
works
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work
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 at
night
 work can manage their family expenses
such
 as the children's education, medical, shopping, bills,
enterteinment
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entertainment
 and grocery. These
are
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expenses should come in every month
while
 they cannot manage out of their salary
while
 they must do the
night
shift
 to cover
this
. Another main
beenfit
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benefit
 is that the companies get more productivity and profit which some companies must run
twenty four
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twenty-four
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 hours
otherwise
 the machinery should be
oprated
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operated
 without break,
hence
, the workers must do the
night
shift
in
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on
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rotation
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a rotation
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 basis.
For instance
,
garments
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garment
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 enterprises usually provide rotation based on work to their employees
due
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apply
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to avoid
the
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apply
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machine
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machines
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stucks
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stuck
. These are the main reasons for working the midnight jobs. There are some drawbacks
on
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to
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this
 adverse trend. One of the disadvantages is that lack of
sleeping
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sleep
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 can cause some
mental related
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mental-related
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 problems like depression and stress, and
as a result
, they cannot concentrate on their work
while
the
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apply
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productivity can be reduced. Another main drawback is that casualty might be happened
due to
 sleeping
disorder
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disorders
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, people should take rest at
night
 time by sleeping and
this
 kind of rest brings more health benefits.
For example
, a recent report
was
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apply
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done by the USA
medical council
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Medical Council
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,
many
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that many
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companie's
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companies'
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 accidents
were
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apply
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occured
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occur
dude
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due
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 to
the
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apply
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lack of sleeping problem. These are the main drawbacks of working at midnight.
To conclude
, working
night
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the night
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shift
 job is quite famous around the world. Managing the family's expenses and companies can
be earned
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earn
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 more productivity
as well as
 profit are the main
advanatages
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advantages
.
Whereas
, the
casuality
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casualty
causality
 might
be
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apply
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occured
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occur
 and depression can be brought
due to
the
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apply
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sleeping disorders are the
disadvanatges
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disadvantages
 of working at
night
 time.
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