You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

You should write at least 150 words.
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pie chart diagrams
,
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represents the difference between 1958 and 2008
of
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adult sharing their time in different activities in a country.
Overall
, over a span of several years, it can be clearly observed that people did not
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through any major significant transformation in their working activity. There are
slght
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slight
changes in working, sleeping and going out with family and friends. In 1958, as per
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diagram 33% persons
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wokingholic, 8%
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of indivisuals
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indivisuals
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individuals
individual
spent their time
in
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relaxing at home followed by 32% like to sleeping and only 2%
peoples
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are
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travelling to work, where 19%
human
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beings
are going
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out with their family and friends followed by 6% humans had other
intrests
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interests
or playing sports. Comparatively in 2008, individual changed their working habits by 42%, later
ralaxing
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relaxing
at home
also
increased by 5%
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13%, but sleeping habit
are
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dicreased
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decreased
to 25%
following
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by going out with friends and family
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%,
although
there
is
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changes in travel to work from 2% to 8% and same with other interests or playing sports 8%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • percentage
  • activities
  • working adults
  • summarise
  • report
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
  • time spent
  • work-related
  • leisure
  • personal care
  • travel
  • noticeable trends
  • over a period
  • devoted
  • significant changes
  • contrast
  • compare
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