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The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart provided offers a comparison of
expenditure
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 on six distinct categories of consumer
goods
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 across four European
nations
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: Germany, Italy,
France
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, and
Britain
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. Each product category's financial outlay is represented in thousands of pounds sterling. From an overarching perspective, it can be observed that
Britain
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 has the highest
expenditure
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 across most
goods
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, particularly in personal stereos and photographic film, with spending reaching approximately 170,000 pounds in both categories. Germany's spending is consistently moderate across the board,
whereas
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France
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 shows a notable preference for
tennis
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racquets
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, surpassing other
nations
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 with a spend near 160,000 pounds. Focusing on specific
goods
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,
tennis
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racquets
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 and photographic film appear to be the items with the highest variance in
expenditure
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 between countries.
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, spending on perfumes and CDs is more uniform across the four
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, with only slight variations in the amount spent. In terms of individual country spending patterns, Italy exhibits the least amount of spending in nearly all categories, with the most significant difference in the toys segment.
France
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,
while
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 spending less on personal stereos and photographic film compared to
Britain
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, shows a clear inclination towards
tennis
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racquets
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, as previously mentioned. The category of CDs demonstrates the smallest range of
expenditure
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 between the countries, suggesting a relatively uniform demand or price across these
nations
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. In conclusion, the data illustrates diverse spending priorities among the countries, with
Britain
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 leading in the
overall
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expenditure
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 on these consumer
goods
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. The specific preferences for items like
tennis
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racquets
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 in
France
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 and the lower spending patterns in Italy are noteworthy trends that might reflect broader consumer
behaviors
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 and economic strategies within these European markets.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, goods, nations, france, britain, tennis, racquets with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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