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The line graph shows the changes in the population of some cities till date. Write a report and select the main features, making comparison where relevant.

The line graph shows the changes in the population of some cities till date. Write a report and select the main features, making comparison where relevant.
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The line chart above illustrates the
population
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 in the state of Oregon by region between 1940 and 2000. The
population
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 is in the "y" axis and the scale is in thousands of
people
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. The "x" axis shows the years in sequence. There are
three
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 lines and each one depicts a County. Columbia is in green; Yamhill is in blue, and
Washington
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 is in yellow. Among the
three
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 regions,
Washington
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 had the highest
population
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 in all periods. At the beginning of the period, the
population
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 in
Washington
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 was almost double that of the other two.
At the end
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 of the period, the
population
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 in
Washington
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 was about
three
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 times higher than the others, showing that the number of residents increased more than in the other Counties. It seems that
Washington
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 had a better economic situation or some specific situation to attract more
people
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 than the others. The number of citizens in Yamhill and Columbia had the same behaviour in
this
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 time interval. From 1940 to 1970 the
population
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 rise of these two regions was slow, but from 1970 to 2000, it was sharp.
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, from 1970 to 2000,
Washington
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 presented a
population
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 rise even sharper. The
population
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 in Columbia and Yamhill increased about
three
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 times in 60 years, from about 30,000 to 90,000
people
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,
whereas
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 the
population
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 in
Washington
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 increased more, from about 75 thousand to 250 thousand
people
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, people, three, washington with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Population
  • Trends
  • Urbanization
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Comparison
  • Rapid increase
  • Plateau
  • Stabilization
  • Infrastructure
  • Economic factors
  • Migration patterns
  • Natural disasters
  • Saturation
  • Time frame
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