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Mrs. Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. write a letter to Mrs. barrettes your letter suggest how you could help her in her home Say why you would like to do this work Explain when you will and will not be available

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Dear Mrs Barrett, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I am writing
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 letter about our next
meet
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. I , my wife and my two
Childrens
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children
 are
plan
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 to come your home to next summer, I am very happy after ten years, we will meet. The following paragraph
discuss
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with
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that happy news,
First,
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next summer, I have a meeting
at
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in
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 Canada
city
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. So I
planed
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planned
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 to come only
me
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to me
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. But my wife and
Childrens
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children
 asked
to
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me about they
will
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 come, Now I booked sheet
my
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 family. I do not know anyone
at
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in
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 Canada. I will go
one day
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 meeting.
That
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 time we would like to come
your
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 home. Because we will arrange a hotel.
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, after
meeting
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the meeting
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 we can not still their. Because hotel packages will increase double. So our family like to meet you all.
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, If
you
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 available
that
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 summer days, let me know, I know you and your family are very busy. I do not force you. If you have free time, we will join your enjoyment. Please let me know after getting
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 letter, I am waiting for your response. Yours faithfully, Mathu.P
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Task Achievement
The letter does not respond to the task given, as it discusses a personal visit rather than offering help to Mrs. Barrett in her home. Respond directly to the task by suggesting specific ways you could assist Mrs. Barrett.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your letter lacks a clear logical structure, and the ideas are not arranged coherently. Make sure to organize your writing into paragraphs with clear purposes: an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
Task Achievement
Address Mrs. Barrett appropriately with a polite introduction and conclusion to maintain a suitable writing tone.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that you maintain a single idea per paragraph for clarity and to strengthen the coherence of your letter.
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