The natural resources such as oil, forest, and freshwater are being consumed at an alarming rate. What problems doeas it cause? How can we solve these problems?

Over the
last
two or three decades, natural
resources
have
reduced
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more tremendously than ever before
due to
the
over
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consumptions
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. The natural
resources
of oil, fresh water and forest are finite and will soon end in the upcoming future. There are
somse
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some
reasons behind
this
adverse
situations
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as well as
there are some possible remedies
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be solved it.
This
essay discusses it briefly for the
folowing
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following
reason
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. There are some reasons for the natural
resources
would be finished. One of the main
cause
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causes
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is the over
consumptions
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consumption
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of
resources
like oil and fresh water. people
are consumed
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more fossil fuels for their
transporation
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transportation
facilities, not only for long travels but
also
the short distances too,
thus
, oils might be wasted by
over
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consumptions
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.
For example
, a recent sensus said that
,
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fossil fuels will be the next 60 years only with now
consumptions
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rate. Another reason is deforestation, the population
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forest
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forests
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enormously
for building
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innumerable residential houses,
consequently
, it would be affected the eco-system like erosion of soil and increase the
earth
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tempreature
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temperature
.
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, there are some possible solutions
could
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be solved
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this
tendency. One of the main
remedy
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is
the
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infinite
energy
should be used
in
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everywhere namely
companies
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in companies
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and houses. There are
an
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alternative sources
can
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that can
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be cured
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this
issue
such
as solar and wind
energy
.
For instance
, solar
system
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systems
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should be fixed on the top of the roof in houses and organisations in order to we can get more infinite
energy
resources
. Another solution is cutting trees should be stopped
instead
of enormous
tress
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should be
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planted
in
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everywhere; the
authority
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should
be implemented
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a strict rules
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against the folks who
cuts
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trees.
To conclude
, deforestation and
over consumption
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overconsumption
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are the main reasons for an alarming rate of oil, fresh water and forest.
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and infinite
energy
sources like wind and solar and more trees should be planted
in
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everwhere
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everywhere
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are the possible
solution
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solutions
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for
this
tendency.
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