Nowadays many people choose to be self- employed rather than to work for a company or organization. Why it might be the case? What could be the disadvantages if being self-employed?

Lately,
self employed
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people
is becoming
trend
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in many
work
environment.
This
became more apparent after the covid pandemic
force
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people
to
work
from home. Despite many advantages of being
self employed
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, many disagree with
this
.
One
of the most mentioned
benefit
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of being
self employed
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is the flexibility of time, worker can adjust their time of
work
freely and decide when to
work
, when to
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time off and do something else. With
this
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they have more balanced
work
and life and
able
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to take care of their family and do things they care about. Another
advantages
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is the ability to set your own pay and virtually limitless income,
this
can be true if
one
have
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a
very
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unique skill that can be done from home,
usually
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this
comes from
IT
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sector. Being self-employed
require
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the ability
of working
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independently without supervision, which is not the forte that many
people
have, certain kind
people
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of people
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are unable to
work
without supervision and guidance,
hence
, being self-employed is not suitable for
this
kind of
people
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person
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. Other than that, being
self-empolyed
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self-employed
and
be
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your own boss means there is no more financial stability given by
established
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company which gives stable income,
one
have
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has
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to do more strict financial planning to cover the living expenses when the hard times
comes
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,
this
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especially happen to
one
who
do
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project-based
work
.
Furthermore
, another thing to consider when deciding to become self-employed is the loss of
benefit
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benefits
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used to be provided by employers,
such
as healthcare, insurance and pension
fund
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funds
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,
this
benefit
when summed can be financially significant to support workers.
Lastly
, self-employed
people
also
have to deal with isolation because they are working alone and rarely makes
connection
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a connection
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with
colleague
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a colleague
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. It can be concluded that many disadvantages of as self-employed
makes
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people
prefer working to an employer.
This
include the
inablity
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inability
ability
to
work
indepently
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independently
, no stable income, absence of
benefit
given by
employer
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the employer
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, and isolation can be hard to deal
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • autonomy
  • flexibility
  • work-life balance
  • entrepreneurial spirit
  • financial instability
  • self-motivation
  • benefits
  • job security
  • healthcare
  • retirement plans
  • administrative tasks
  • compliance
  • isolation
  • camaraderie
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