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Nowadays many people choose to be self- employed rather than to work for a company or organization. Why it might be the case? What could be the disadvantages if being self-employed?

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One of the most significant issues of the contemporary era is
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recruitment and jobs. Unlike
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 centuries, people cannot live these days apart from
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societies and metropolises.
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 considered a useful person these days, we have to find a career for good, and maybe another temporary occupation. A majority of individuals used to be obsessed with working in a company previously, but these people's tendency is
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to choose self-employed jobs. Undoubtedly, there are different reasons why we are seeking a job in
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 stressful world. All of us need to have a permanent job which is not
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dependent on anyone.
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, an office manager has a safe career with myriad benefits and advantages. Despite all of
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 points that might be seen from
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, that manager do not have independence in his private life. He has to
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 the achievements and all the expectations.
On the other hand
, a blogger who is active on social media can acquire more money and reputation these days.
in addition
 to having more free time and freedom which helps him to be more creative and energized. So it has its own upsides. On the flip side, in spite of all the advantages of being a self-employed person, we cannot deny its drawbacks.
For instance
, you cannot imagine a safe and guaranteed future for yourself because everything might become vice versa. As an example, there were many bloggers and social activists in my country who were trying to gain money via ads, but the government limited those applications and most of them became unemployed.
As a result
, we cannot easily trust freelancer occupations. In sum,
although
 self-employment is a very good option for juveniles and young people, it might not be a reasonable way of living and making money for anyone.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the essay maintains a focused and coherent structure throughout, clearly presenting the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Transitions between ideas should be smooth, and paragraphs should be well-organized and logically sequenced.
task achievement
It is essential to fully address all parts of the prompt. This means discussing the reasons why people might choose self-employment and exploring the disadvantages in detail. Make sure that each idea is expanded upon and supported with examples or evidence.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • autonomy
  • flexibility
  • work-life balance
  • entrepreneurial spirit
  • financial instability
  • self-motivation
  • benefits
  • job security
  • healthcare
  • retirement plans
  • administrative tasks
  • compliance
  • isolation
  • camaraderie
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