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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The plans demonstrate the current version of
airport’s
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the airport’s
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 southwest site and its proposed enhancement plan for
upcoming
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the upcoming
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 year.
Overall
, the plan is
widening
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to widen
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 the gate
area
 with additional
gates
 and increase the facility number inside the building. In detail, the only areas that will be the same are passport control, customs and security points
placing
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placed
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 at both departures and arrivals. Regarding the
gates
area
, the number of the
gates
 will be 18
instead
 of 8. Since the number of
gates
 will be increased, the walkway we have today will be replaced by
sky
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a sky
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 train in order to
to
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move more fast between
gates
.
Furthermore
, the entrance and exit
door
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doors
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 at the departures and arrivals building will be doubled. When we
will
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apply
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enter the departure
area
,
new
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the new
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 bag drop
area
 will be placed in the same
place
 where the check-in point is and
also
 check-in point will take
cafe’s
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the cafe’s
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place
 and
then
 the cafe will replace
to
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the diagonal corner of its original
place
.
Additionally
, in the arrivals
area
 new cafe, ATM and
place
 for car hiring will be opened. The building will
be widen
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be widened
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 from
right
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a right
the right
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 corner just for placing the car hiring facility.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Work on logically organizing your ideas. Your essay should have a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Use paragraphs effectively to separate different main features.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion. The introduction should set the context and the conclusion should effectively summarize the main points or propose implications.
Coherence and Cohesion
Support each main point with clear details and explanations. Try to expand on how each feature compares to the original and why these changes are significant.
Task Achievement
Ensure that your response is complete, addressing all parts of the task and providing a clear representation of the information given.
Task Achievement
Your ideas should be expressed clearly and comprehensively. Consider each aspect of the plan and discuss it in a way that the reader can easily understand.
Task Achievement
Use specific examples to support your points. This will give the reader a clearer understanding of the development and changes taking place at the airport site.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • terminal
  • runway
  • refurbishment
  • redevelopment
  • amenities
  • car park
  • hangar
  • concourse
  • public transport hub
  • access roads
  • boarding gates
  • check-in desk
  • baggage claim
  • departure lounge
  • observation deck
  • duty-free shopping
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