The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.

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The charts show information about the percentage of males and females who do housework in the first chart, and the average

time

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each gender does housework in the second chart which involves some kinds of home tasks

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as cooking, cleaning, pet care, and housing repairs. As can be seen from the charts, it is obvious that both women and men prefer to do cooking, and they

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spend a lot of

time

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to do cooking. In detail, cooking is the most popular in both the percentage and the average

time

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in each gender.

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, the lowest percentage of people in house repairs in comparison with cooking, compared 20 to 60 per cent in males accounting for less than three times and 10 to 80 per cent in women accounting for less than ten times.

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, they spent

time

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cooking,with 60 and 85 minutes in men and females

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house repairs spent a mere 20 in men and 5 minutes in women.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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163 words

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