The line graph shows the average number of weekly patieents vivsiting four clinics of a hospital form 2010 to 2016.

The line graph shows the average number of weekly patieents vivsiting four clinics of a hospital form 2010 to 2016.
the line
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graph
gives us
informatione
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information
about the average
number
of patients who have visited
bith
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birth
control ,eye ,diabetic and dental
clinics
between 2010 and 2016 ,
overall
it can be seen that the
amount
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number
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of
visitores
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visitors
have been increased over the period ,significantly for eyes
clinics
,
however
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,
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bith
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birth
control patients remained stable . refers to the eye and
Diabestic
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Diabetic
clinics
which the
number
of sick people
more
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visited for , eye hospital stood at around 110 weekly
visitor
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visitors
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in 2010,
although
this
number
was dramatic rise to 350 in 2016 ,
also
Diabestic
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Diabetic
clinic Visitors in 2010 saw reached steadily from about 55 to 100 in 2014 , but
this
amount
was increase
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quickly to over 155 visitors . regards to
other clinic
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another clinic
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such
as Birth
conrtol
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control
and dental , Dental
clinics
have
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started with 100 patients during the period 2014 and 2016 the amount of visitors increased gradually . over the period the
number
of people who have visited Birth control remained unchanged
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, clinics with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • average
  • weekly patients
  • clinics
  • hospital
  • trends
  • increases
  • decreases
  • peaks
  • troughs
  • fluctuations
  • comparative analysis
  • time period
  • consistent
  • inconsistent
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • decline
  • rise
  • remained stable
  • notable
  • significant
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