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Write a letter to the manager of a cinema (movie theatre) about a jacket you have left behind after a film. In your letter: · Describe the jacket · Describe where you were seated · Explain what you want to be done

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Dear Manager,                          I am writing
this
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 letter regarding the
jacket
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 which I left on my seat in your theatre
couple
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a couple
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 of days ago.
Firstly
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, let me provide you
the
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with the
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 information about my
jacket
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. The
Jacket
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 was black in colour with red colour
strips
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stripes
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 running through the shoulder.
Moreover
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, Number
eight
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Eight
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 is written with
large
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a large
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 font on the back and it is hooded. The material of
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jacket
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the jacket
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 is wollen mixed with polyester. It was on
the Tuesday
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Tuesday
a Tuesday
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 the 13th
July
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of July
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, I
had been
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went
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 to your cinema
hall
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,
Hall
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 number 2, Seat number 12C Balcony ticket. Show timing was 2:30 pm - 6:00pm. The theatre was completely jam-packed.
Moreover
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, Air-conditioner was not doing that well to kept the
hall
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 temperature appropriate. So, I removed the
jacket
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 and kept it on the seat. But unwilling at the time of leaving the
hall
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, I forget to collect it. I request you to please find the
jacket
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 and parcel it to my mailing address at your convenient time.I will be on my toes to hear from you.yours sincerelyNithin
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greeting and closing
Consider revising the structure of your letter to include a proper greeting and closing. For example, begin with 'Dear [Manager's Name or Cinema Name],' and sign off with 'Kind regards,' followed by your full name.
single idea per paragraph
Use clear paragraphing with a single idea per paragraph, such as a separate paragraph for describing the jacket, another to describe where you were seated, and a third for explaining what action you would like taken.
complete response
To fully achieve the task response, ensure you have covered all points of the prompt. You could include more detail about the action you want taken, such as asking the manager to contact you or setting a date by which you hope the jacket will be returned.
logical structure
Ensure your writing has a logical flow with appropriate linking words and phrases to aid coherence. Additionally, check for any grammatical or spelling errors to improve clarity.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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