Solar energy is becoming more and more popular as a source of household energy in many countries around the world. Why does it happen? Is it a positive or negative development?

Solar
power
has emerged as a primary source to meet
energy
need
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in the domestic sector in some parts of the world. There is one main factor responsible for
this
change and in my
opinion
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opinion,
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this
shift towards solar
power
is beneficial both for individuals and
environment
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the environment
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. The main factor which has contributed to
this
switch towards solar
power
is the inability of the government to provide
uninterrupted
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power
supply. Even
in
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this
time
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time,
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many areas
are
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mainly
village
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villages
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or remote locations are either not connected to
state
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the state
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power
grid or have to face frequent
power
outages. So, be self-dependent these
people
have installed solar panels, as
sun
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is present almost everywhere.
As a consequence
of
increased
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popularity of solar
energy
, first of all,
people
can enjoy more savings because not only
they
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get rid
off from
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the hefty monthly
elecricity
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electricity
bills but installing solar systems
also
needs minimal investment
due to
federal schemes in some countries to provide subsidies for encouraging cleaner
energy
use. So,
people
can use
this
money for other important purposes.
Similarly
, the planet is
also
advantaged especially, when
this
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these
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cleaner
energy
sources
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source
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replaces
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any traditional methods of obtaining electricity
such
as diesel or natural gas generators during
power
outage
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outages
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leads
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to clean air
along with
quiet surroundings.
To conclude
,
although
many
people
have adopted
this
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these
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new
energy
resources to beat the challenges faced by them for receiving electricity 24*7. Yet, I believe that
this
initiative
along with
meeting their requirements,
provide
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monetary
as well as
environment
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benefits to them.
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