The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015.

The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015.
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the
number
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of females entering higher
educationin
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education in
the year 1980 and 2015 from five countries ( UK, USA, Australia, South Korea, and France).
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, the
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percentage
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of
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women
in higher education is
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in all five countries by the year 2015.
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in Australia
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it
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remain
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the same as in 1980 In 1980, Australia
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the highest
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of women at over 55% followed by France with 50% of women attending
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higher education.
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, both
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and
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the USA
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have
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number
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of
female
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females
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studied
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at 35% and around 38% respectively. And in
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South Korea has the lowest
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of female
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students
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in higher education at about 15%.
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, in 2015, the percentage of
woman
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women
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leavers going to higher studies
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at the same level at 58%, and equal highest with the USA.
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, the proportion of
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the UK
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and France is increasing to approximately 55% in both countries. For South Korea, where the percentages
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from 15% to 30%, which was the most dramatic
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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