The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The bar chart gives demographic information for employment sectors and gender in Australia
last
year. There were significantly more
men
than
women
in management,
production
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and production
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- over 400,00 in each case and 800,000 more for tradesperson roles. When looking at management roles proportionally, they were three times more likely to be filled by
men
.
However
, the gap was largest in trade occupations with
men
ten times more likely to be doing
this
kind of work. There was a less sizeable difference for labourers and semi-professionals but still considerably more
men
than
women
. The only sectors in which there were more
women
than
men
were those of semi-professionals and labourers with 150,000 more
women
in each.
Therefore
, when looking at the figures, you can see that there
were
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was
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still a high number of
men
who were employed in these areas.
Overall
, we can see that there are more
men
than
women
in nearly every sector, and even those with a female majority, the figures were close.
This
means that
men
make up a disproportionate amount of the Australian workforce.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment figures
  • Sectors
  • Significant disparities
  • Gender balance
  • Skewed
  • Trends
  • Patterns
  • Dominant
  • Inferred
  • Labor market
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Insights
  • Implications
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