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The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The chart illustrates
that
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the
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 numbers of
incidents
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 and
injuries
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 per 100 million passenger miles travelled by transportation type in 2002.
Overall
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, In 2002
Incidents
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are
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were
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 higher and
Injuries
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are
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were
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 lower.Mainly in the chart Demand Respond as large
incidents
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 and
injuries
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while
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compare
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compared
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 to others.
While
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otherside
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other side
, very low in Commuter
Rail
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in
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apply
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Incidents
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 and
Injuries
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as
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apply
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only 10 per
cent
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To begin
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 with, Commuter
Rail
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as
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is
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 very low in
Incidents
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 and
Injuries
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,
while
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 Heavy
Rail
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as
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has
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 50 per
cent
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 in
Incidents
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 and
Injuries
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 is lower
compare
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compared
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 to
Incidents
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.
Additionally
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, in Light
Rail
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 as above 50 per
cent
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 in
Incidents
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 and
Injuries
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 as lower than 50 per
cent
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. In Bus little bit same in
Incidents
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 above 50 per
cent
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 and in
Injuries
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 as below 50 per
cent
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.
Lastly
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, Demand
Respond
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Response
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as
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is
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 very high in
Incidents
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 and
Injuries
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 which
as
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is
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 above 200 per
cent
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 in
Incidents
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 and above 150 per
cent
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 in
Injuries
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words incidents, injuries, rail, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "numbers of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Passenger Miles Travelled (PMT)
  • incidents per 100 million PMT
  • injuries per 100 million PMT
  • transportation type
  • comparative measures
  • statistical analysis
  • proportionate level
  • anomalous data
  • discrepancies in safety figures
  • severity of incidents
  • frequency of occurrences
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