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The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The chart illustrates
that
Correct determiner usage
the
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 numbers of
incidents
 and
injuries
 per 100 million passenger miles travelled by transportation type in 2002.
Overall
, In 2002
Incidents
are
Wrong verb form
were
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 higher and
Injuries
are
Wrong verb form
were
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 lower.Mainly in the chart Demand Respond as large
incidents
 and
injuries
while
compare
Wrong verb form
compared
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 to others.
While
otherside
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other side
, very low in Commuter
Rail
in
Change preposition
apply
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Incidents
 and
Injuries
as
Correct word choice
apply
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only 10 per
cent
To begin
 with, Commuter
Rail
as
Correct your spelling
is
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 very low in
Incidents
 and
Injuries
,
while
 Heavy
Rail
as
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has
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 50 per
cent
 in
Incidents
 and
Injuries
 is lower
compare
Replace the word
compared
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 to
Incidents
.
Additionally
, in Light
Rail
 as above 50 per
cent
 in
Incidents
 and
Injuries
 as lower than 50 per
cent
. In Bus little bit same in
Incidents
 above 50 per
cent
 and in
Injuries
 as below 50 per
cent
.
Lastly
, Demand
Respond
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Response
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as
Correct your spelling
is
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 very high in
Incidents
 and
Injuries
 which
as
Correct your spelling
is
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 above 200 per
cent
 in
Incidents
 and above 150 per
cent
 in
Injuries
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words incidents, injuries, rail, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "numbers of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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