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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The figures display crime statistics in the UK for the
last
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 year. The information in the line graph shows the relationship between the number of
crimes
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 committed and human age,
while
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 the pie chart shows the various crime types. As
it
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apply
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can be seen in the line graph, teenagers and adults in their early twenties are the main reason for the most
crimes
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 committed, and unfortunately, nearly a million
crimes
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 are committed by the age of 20. The number of
crimes
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then
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 deteriorates and becomes steady as people get older than 28. When looking at the pie chart, it's obvious that
crimes
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 related to violence make up nearly half of
crimes
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 committed,
while
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 theft and drug
crime
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crimes
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 are nearly the same percentage, around 20%. Less serious social disorder
crimes
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 are relatively low compared to others.
Overall
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, it's clear that teenagers and most adults are more likely to commit
crimes
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, and the majority of these
crimes
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 are related to violence.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crimes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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