The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given diagram

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illustrates

the

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rain

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rainwater

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water

harvesting in which

water

is collected and treated to be used as any drinkable liquid in an

Asutralian

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Australian

town.

Overall

, the process is composed

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5 steps,

firstly

collecting

rain

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rainwater

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water

and

filter

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filtering

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it.

Then

storage

tank

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a tank

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where it can be treated with chemicals and

finally

re-distributed to

household

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the household

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with, every house is connected

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two pipelines, one is linked to collect all

water

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the water

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and

second

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the second

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is used to transport liquid to

water

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the water

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filter.

Where liquid

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filteration

take

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takes

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place and after the filtration

water

is transported

though

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through

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pipe

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a pipe

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storage

where all harvested

water

is stored. Another cistern

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situated

besides

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beside

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storage

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the storage

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tank is

water

treatment, where

liquid

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the liquid

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is transported by pipes through

storage

and it will

treated

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water

by different chemicals and make

water

drinkable.

Then

with the help of

pipelines

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water

is moved for reuse in homes as drinking

water

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, storage with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
24Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

152 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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