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The graphs below show the size of the ozone hole over Antarctica and the production of three ozone-damaging gases from 1980 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the size of the ozone hole over Antarctica and the production of three ozone-damaging gases from 1980 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the line charts give us information about the
size
 of
ozone
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the ozone
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 hole in thousands
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and
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also
 the
anticipate
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anticipated
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of
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apply
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three damaging
gases
 to
ozone
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the ozone
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 layer
such
 as
CFC
 11,CFC12 and N2O between 1980 and 2000 ,
overall
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apply
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it can be seen that the amount of
ozone
hole
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holes
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increased dramatically over the period . and both
gases
 B and C rose
sigificantly
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significantly
in the
ozone
 layer ,
however
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however,
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gase
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gas
 A
was
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apply
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declined . refers to
size
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the size
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 of
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the
an
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ozone
 hole over
Antarcita
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Antarctica
stood at about 100KM ,after following 3 years the
size
 of
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the
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ozone
has
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apply
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jumped quickly to 2000KM in 1990 ,
then
this
 amount dropped to around 1000KM in 1995 ,
although
 ,in 2000 saw the
size
 of
ozone
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the ozone
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 rose sharply .  regards to
preduction
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reduction
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of
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three damaging
gases
 , on the one
hand
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hand,
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 both
destraction
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destruction
distraction
gases
 like CFC12
as well as
 N2O were
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a
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dramatic rise
to
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in
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ozone
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the ozone
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 layer ,
for
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with
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 C from 0 to approximately 25 million
tonnes
 , for B from 25 to nearly 45
tonnes
 .
one
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One
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the
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another hand
CFC
 11 fell in significantly , from 65 million
tonnes
 to fairly 5 million
tonnes
 .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words size, ozone, gases, cfc, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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