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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the statistics of the UK unoccupied population spent their activities over a 12-month period.
Overall
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are
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 divided by two sexual identities and times.
Housework
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 was the most favourable occupation for ladies during the daylight and after
lunch
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lunchtime
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time
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.
On the other hand
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, for the gentleman, seeking
for
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apply
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another opportunity was the desired activity in the morning, and watching TV was the favourite during
the
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his
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 leisure
time
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. In the daylight period,
three
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the three
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 most popular occupations for both men and women were
housework
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, buying groceries, and Job seeking. For the gentlemen, job hunting was the most desired activity with
the
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a
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 proportion of 22% and drinking was the least preferred activity with only
at
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1% which is similar
with
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 the females.
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,
housework
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 was the main occupation for
the
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apply
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women with just around
a
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apply
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half of
total
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the total
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time
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. For the afternoon
time
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, or
can
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what can
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 be classified as leisure
time
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, there were four activities that preferred around 12% to 14%
for
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of
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 the men,
such
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 as job hunting, visiting relatives, gardening, and watching TV for
entertainments
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entertainment
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.
Whereas
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, taking a nap was despised with only 1%. Similar
with
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to
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 the
day break
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daybreak
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time
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,
housework
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 was still the main
activities
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activity
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 for the women followed by shopping and visiting friends in the afternoon.
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 they were not interested in exercising and staying in bed.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words housework, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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