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The chart below shows the distribution of different income groups in cities and regional centres of Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows the distribution of different income groups in cities and regional centres of Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.
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The provided bar chart delineates the distribution of the Australian population in
cities
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 and regional areas based on their annual
income
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 percentages.
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, discernibly, urban residents exhibit a higher mean
income
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 than their counterparts in regional
centers
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. In both urban and regional settings, the predominant segments of the populace fall within the lower
middle
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 and
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middle
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middle-income
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income
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 brackets, signifying annual earnings within the ranges of $40,000-$70,000 and $70,000-$120,000, respectively.
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, a distinction arises as the preeminent group in
cities
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 comprises
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middle
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income
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 earners, constituting 35%,
while
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 in regional
centers
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, the foremost group is the lower
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middle
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middle-income
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income
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 category, comprising approximately 34%. Parallel trends manifest in both urban and regional locales with regard to the least and most affluent segments of the population, i.e., those earning less than $40,000 (low
income
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) and exceeding $120,000 (high
income
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). Noteworthy differentiations emerge, wherein the low-
income
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 demographic in
cities
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 constitutes merely about 13% of the population, representing a disparity of approximately 10% in comparison to regional areas.
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, the high-
income
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 cohort demonstrates a 5% augmentation in
cities
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 as opposed to regional
centers
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