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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (Co2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (Co2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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A glance at a line graph provided reveals the amount of CO2 released on average divided into 4 various kinds
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 as the UK, Sweden, Italy and Portugal, measured in metric tonnes, between 1967 and 2007.
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, there was a recessive
growth
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 pattern observed in the UK’s CO2 emission and that of Sweden, which had a negative relation compared to that of Italy and Portugal. In terms of the released amount of CO2 in the UK, despite being higher than any categories at over 10 in 1967, it deteriorated steadily and constantly to nearly 9 which maintained its crown after 4 decades. With regard to Sweden’s CO2 emissions, it witnessed an exponential hike from 8 to over 10 which was its peak in 1977, before dwindling drastically and consistently to about 5 in the year end. As for the released amount of CO2 in Italy and
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Portugal,
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 they had a homogenous
growth
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 pattern, they were different in levels of
growth
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. From 4 to merely 8 is the remarkable number of the former which experienced a two-fold increase. Meanwhile, the latter went through a sharp
growth
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 from approximately 2 to 6 which had the same ending points
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 that of Sweden during the mentioned period of time.

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