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The diagrams below show the present college and its plan in 2025 as proposed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the present college and its plan in 2025 as proposed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given maps illustrate the current layout and future development of
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college
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the college
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 in 2020.
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, a comparison of the maps
reveal
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 that the layout will
be totally transform
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be totally transformed
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 and expanding the
college
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 building for academic facilities.
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Moreover
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Moreover,
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 all the
footpath
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footpaths
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 and garden will be demolished and change the door entrance to the opposite position. In terms of the
college
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 prior to the development, the main
road
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is
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was
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 placed in the south of the building with a bus stop situated in the corner between
intersection
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the intersection
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 of the main
road
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 and
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foot
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footpath
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path
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.
Moreover
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, the
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foot
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footpath
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path
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 has a T shape,
started
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starting
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 from
main
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the main
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road
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 to the north with
car
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a car
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 park to the west and connected to another
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foot
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footpath
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path
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 from west to
the
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apply
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east. The main gate to the
college
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 can be accessed from the
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foot
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footpath
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path
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 and
situated
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is situated
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in
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apply
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north of the
college
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 building. Inside
of
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apply
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the
building
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building,
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 there are several
part
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parts
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, in the west
area
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 of the door situated a
luch
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lunch
area
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 and two classrooms. Meanwhile
the
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apply
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in the east
area
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 lie
in
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apply
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a classroom, a reception and a library.
Last
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, the toilet can
found
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be found
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in
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apply
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across
of
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from
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 the door. Regarding the changes plan in the layout, the
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foot
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footpath
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path
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 and garden will be removed
for expanding
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to expand
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 the main building and car park. Some facilities inside the building
also
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 will be experienced several
renovation
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renovations
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, the entrance will be moved to the south of the building and can
be access
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be accessed
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 directly from the
road
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.
Furthermore
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, two extra
classroom
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classrooms
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 will be added on the east side of the building.
Therefore
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 the library will
relocated
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accross
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across
 it and
reception
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the reception
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srink
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sink
 to a circle in the middle of the building.
Shop
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The shop
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also
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 will added it the north of the
bulding
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building
 next to the new toilet location.
However
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, there will
no
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be no
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 change
location
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in location
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 for
bus
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the bus
a bus
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 stop, lunch
area
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 and one classroom.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, moreover".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words college, road, foot, path, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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