The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three period and whether they were studying full-time and part-time.
There are two bar graphs indicating the number of men and women
where
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who
they
study Correct pronoun usage
apply
for
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apply
full
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full-time
time
and part-
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part-time
time
over a period of three years in Britain as shown by the graph
titles. The y axis
depicts the number of people and the x-axis shows the years.The shape of each Add a hyphen
y-axis
graph
is notable upon first analysis.
The Male graph
depicts people doing full
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full-time
time
education are 800 and part timers
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part-timers
are
below 200 over the three years Unnecessary verb
apply
while
the female graph
indicates the number of full
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full-time
time
education gradually increases
from 1970 to 1990.
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increased
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