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The line graph demonstrates demand for data at a tourist office in the UK from January to June.

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overall
 structure, it is readily apparent that, the number of all
request’s
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 forms underwent
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the
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 increase over the entire period, apart from email. The email/by letter
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 or less the same during the whole period. The were 900 requests form by telephone in January, a figure which rose to
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 of 1600 forms in June, before a sharp decline to 800 in February and the complete recovery to its starting figure by the end of the time surveyed. At the same time demand forms in person started lower at 400, grew up the over period. In January were 700 requests by letter/e-mail. It began to go down from the month of March. It reached 400 in May and it went like
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 until January.
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