You recently organised and old a meeting for your company. Which took place in local hotel. In their feedback, participant at the meeting said that they liked the hotel but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter: say what the participants liked about the hotel explain why they were unhappy about the food suggest what the managers should do to improve the food in future

Dear Madam or Sir, My company's budget meeting was held in your hotel
last
Friday. We are
global
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company,
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I hosted many guests around the world. After a meeting, I had a lot of feedback about your hotel from my visitors. The hotel's location was perfect, it was easy to access the city
center
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. The rooms were great,
clean
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and
historical
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designs were impressive. But
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would like to express my and my guest's dissatisfaction with the lunch. Your cuisine was open budget, there were no responsible staff in here. Visitors can easily touch foods with no gloves,
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one
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them,
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, hygiene rules were not implemented. Your cuisine was not well enough. We were
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more world cuisines. Like Japanese, Chinese etc.. As you know, nowadays vegan people ratio
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increased and there
were
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no vegan
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. My vegan visitors starved. My suggestion is, you should serve
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more different cuisines. Maybe you should hire
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Italian chef for Italian
foods
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. In
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you can find my information
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my e-mail. I look forward to your reply, Yours Faithfully, Merve Kerküklü
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Ensure that each paragraph is centered around one main idea and develop that idea fully. Some paragraphs in the letter attempted to cover multiple points, which can lead to a lack of clarity.
coherence cohesion
Organize your writing logically, using connectors to clearly show the relationship between ideas, and make sure your letter follows a proper business format.
task achievement
Maintain a clear and polite tone throughout, suitable for a business correspondence, and always use professional and respectful language.
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Address all parts of the task thoroughly. While you have mentioned some specific details, expanding on these by giving more direct explanations or examples could enhance the thoroughness of the response.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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