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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual ’ income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual ’ income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart elaborates on the number of
people
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 who live in the US in the different categories of yearly salary in three distinct years.
Overall
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, it is evident that the earnings of the 75-90 K
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dollars
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dollar
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group
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 was the smallest
group
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 each year.
On the other hand
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, the largest
group
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 in 2007 and 2015 was the
people
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 who achieved more than
100kk
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100k
dollars
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.
According to
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 the chart, the population of US households who earn less than 25 k
dollars
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 was 25
million
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 in 2007 and it increased to almost 29
million
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 in 2011 and
then
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 decreased slightly to 28
million
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 in 2015. The category of individuals with 25-49 thousand
dollars
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 was the same as the previous one and after an approximately 3
million
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 increase in 2011, it was almost 27
million
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 in 2015. Regarding the highest income
group
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, almost 29
million
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people
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 earned it and
then
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 after a brief reduction, the greatest amount of
people
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 earned more than 100k
dollars
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 in 2015.
On the other hand
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, the 50-74.9 and 75-99.9 sections allocated the smallest groups. Interestingly, the former
group
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 remained stable in
each
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every
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 three years
by
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with
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 almost 21
million
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 households.
Additionally
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, the latter had an unremarkable change and it reached 14 to 15
million
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 between 2007 and 2015.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, dollars, group, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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