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The tables below illustrate the number of students who have come from China, America and India to study in the USA or Canada in 2002 and 2003.

The tables below illustrate the number of students who have come from China, America and India to study in the USA or Canada in 2002 and 2003.
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The tables below illustrate the number of
students
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 who have come from China, America and
India
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 to study in the
USA
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 or
Canada
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 in 2002 and 2003.
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, the total number of
students
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 studying in the
USA
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 far surpassed that of
Canada
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. In
Canada
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, the majority of pupils originate from China and in the
USA
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 most people come from
India
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. The statistics for the
students
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 rose for every single country in 2003 apart from Indians in the US, which decreased slightly. Looking at the
Canada
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 table in more detail, there was a big rise in the number of
students
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 that came from China from 2002 to 2003 to
Canada
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, the figures respectively being 5,4000 and 7,850.
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 had the biggest change of 45%. The statistics for America and
India
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 remained relatively the same over the time period,
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however
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India
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 had nearly 4 times the percentage difference compared to the US, 35 and 9. The
USA
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 chart demonstrates that the majority of pupils came from
India
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,
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numeric
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 declined slightly from 200,000 to 182,000 in 2003.China’s figures increased marginally over the year alongside
Canada
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’s, with
Canada
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 having the biggest increase in percentage of 7%.
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