The tables below illustrate the number of students who have come from China, America and India to study in the USA or Canada in 2002 and 2003.

The tables below illustrate the number of students who have come from China, America and India to study in the USA or Canada in 2002 and 2003.
The tables below illustrate the number of
students
who have come from China, America and
India
to study in the
USA
or
Canada
in 2002 and 2003.
Overall
, the total number of
students
studying in the
USA
far surpassed that of
Canada
. In
Canada
, the majority of pupils originate from China and in the
USA
most people come from
India
. The statistics for the
students
rose for every single country in 2003 apart from Indians in the US, which decreased slightly. Looking at the
Canada
table in more detail, there was a big rise in the number of
students
that came from China from 2002 to 2003 to
Canada
, the figures respectively being 5,4000 and 7,850.
This
column
also
had the biggest change of 45%. The statistics for America and
India
remained relatively the same over the time period,
however
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India
had nearly 4 times the percentage difference compared to the US, 35 and 9. The
USA
chart demonstrates that the majority of pupils came from
India
,
however
this
numeric
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declined slightly from 200,000 to 182,000 in 2003.China’s figures increased marginally over the year alongside
Canada
’s, with
Canada
having the biggest increase in percentage of 7%.
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