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Work is being done on the street where you live. The noise is disturbing you. Write a letter of complaint to your local council. In your letter: -Introduce yourself. -Explain what the problem is. -Suggest solutions to the problem.

#work #street #noise #complaint #council #-introduce #-explain #-suggest
Dear Madam or Sir, I am living in Baker St. No :21. I am writing to complain about
construction
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work
 of the
State
 Building.
Due to
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I am a doctor,
sometimes
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and sometimes
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 I
work
 in a hospital until late hours. To
work
 in the
State
 hospital as
a
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an
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 emergency doctor is too
tired
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. When I arrive
to
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home, I need to rest. But
last
 Friday the
State
 Building's
construction
has
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started and unfortunately it remains late hours of
night
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the night
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. There is a very loud noise all around the street and the
working
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machines are working without
stop
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stopping
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. I can not rest and I can not get sleep since the beginning of
construction
. I know
this
 location is
a
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 earthquake region and the
State
 Building must
have to reinforce
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. But remaining
of
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in
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 the
construction
 until to late hours of
night
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the night
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,
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 bothers me and my neighbours. It bothers not only me
also
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but also
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 old people and babies. I would appreciate it
,
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if you could
this
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do this
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work
 before 19.00.
Therefore
, when people
leaave
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leave
 from their job and arrive
to
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at
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 their
home
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homes
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, they can rest. And babies can easily sleep at
nights
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night
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. Your Faithfully, Merve Kerküklü
Submitted by mervekerkuklu on

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coherence cohesion
- Ensure logical progression of ideas with clear sequencing, paragraphing, and use of cohesive devices.
coherence cohesion
- Maintain consistent formality throughout the letter and adhere to conventions of the format, including proper opening and closing salutations.
coherence cohesion
- Focus one idea or argument per paragraph, providing adequate support for each, to enhance clarity and readability.
task achievement
- Address all aspects of the task, ensuring you provide enough detail for each point required in the prompt.
task achievement
- Maintain a suitably formal tone throughout the letter, appropriate for the context and recipient, avoiding informal language and expressions.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Local council
  • Disturbance
  • Resident
  • Noise pollution
  • Disruption
  • Work-from-home
  • Well-being
  • Adequate notice
  • Inconvenience
  • Noise control measures
  • Temporary relocation
  • Work schedule
  • Prompt attention
  • Amicable resolution
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