You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society? You should write at least 250 words.

In some countries, many pupils decide to choose other
subject
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instead
of
science
subject
in university at
this
time. In my point of view,
science
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not attractive
for
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to
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many students because it seems difficult, complicated, and expensive to
contibute
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contribute
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on
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its research. First of all, not all people
have
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a
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big
fan
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fans
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on
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of
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number
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numbers
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or math
while
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the
science
subject
cannot relinquish
from
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that.
As a result
, just to avoid the complicated
subject
, many students aspire to another field in college.
For
example
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social,
bussiness
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business
, etc. that look much easier and can
direcly
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directly
apply in daily activity to earn money. Not only that but the expenditure on the area of study
also
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is also
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quite
relitive
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relatively
expensive for many people.
On
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the
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other words,
experiment
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experiments
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and research in
science
have needed
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need
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a lot of money to purchase the materials
of
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for
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study.
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,
making
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a concoction of
medical
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a medical
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subject
, researchers must spend money to buy several ingredients and do experiments with the
hypothesis
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hypotheses
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trying
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and errors.
This
issue can lead to
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harmful situation with the butterfly effects because in the future the number of experts in
science
in the world will be increased to solve problems in our nature and health.
Besides
, the lack of specialist in
this
field can impact
to
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science
and technology development,
where
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those
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are extremely crucial to
improve
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improving
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some countries being developed country and
protect
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protecting
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their country from harmful
situation
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situations
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that can
be coming
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come
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from
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in
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many ways.
For example
, a new pandemic disease
that
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caused by viruses or
microorganism
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microorganisms
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has been possible to spread over the world again which
is
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should be
spontaneoulsy
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spontaneously
spontaneous
tackle
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by many experts to deal with that problem. In conclusion, the world
need
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needs
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the
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apply
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experts in
science
and the
subject
must be explained in
the
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a
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simple way to encourage
the
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young people to be more
interest
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interested
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on
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in
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science
.
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