You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

You should write at least 150 words
The chart illustrates the proportion of
time
activities that were spent by mature people in a state in 1958 and 2008.
Overall
, there are six categories of spending
time
which the working activity was the most popular one. In 1858, many adults were spending the majority of their
time
at
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working with 33%. Sleeping
time
was
also
hight
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high
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at 32%, compared to the lowest that can be seen in
traveling
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travelling
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to work at just 2%. People who decided to go out with their
friend
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or family were
being
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the third trending on leisure
time
at 19%.
Moreover
, other interests or playing sports and relaxing at home
was
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counted just under 10%.
On
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the
another
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year, in 2008, killing
time
on working became more popular (42%) compared to the first year given.
Additionally
, sleeping and relaxing at home were 25% and 13% respectively. The
others
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three categories can be seen
just
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under 10% where going out was the lowest (6%).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • percentage
  • activities
  • working adults
  • summarise
  • report
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
  • time spent
  • work-related
  • leisure
  • personal care
  • travel
  • noticeable trends
  • over a period
  • devoted
  • significant changes
  • contrast
  • compare
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