Do you agree or disagree that in the near future the role of teachers will be taken by the technology?

There is no doubt
technology
is playing
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important role in today's life of individuals and some people believe that
techology
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technology
will take a human place in future but I partially agree with
this
statement.
Firstly
,
Technology
makes
a
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human life easier and these days
a
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life of a person
is depending
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on
technology
whether it is a computer ,
internet
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or electricity etc .
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Students can take their online classes
any where
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without wasting their time
in
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travelling , it
also
save
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a cost of commuting
expense
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.
In
addition
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pupil
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pupils
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feel more comfortable at home
infront
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in front
of their parents so do not hesitate
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clearifying
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clear
their doubts as they
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shadow
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of guardians.
On the other hand
,
Teacher
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are human
being
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beings
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and humans are full of emotions which is good for maintaining a good
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among
educator
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and
student
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students
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.
For instance
teacher always
suggest
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the
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better ideas
in
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the benefit of students because a teacher knows the capability of each student in her class.
beside
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that during online
class
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classes
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student
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students
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can be lazy because
computer
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the computer
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cannot monitor
this
even though in offline
session
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kids will be more attentive as a human
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them. In conclusion , Each thing
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own pros and cons but
its
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very difficult for
technology
to replace a human being as people are full of emotion which is
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part
for
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all individuals.
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