Do you agree or disagree that in the near future the role of teachers will be taken by the technology?
There is no doubt Students can take their online classes
technology
is playing a
important role in today's life of individuals and some people believe that Change the article
an
techology
will take a human place in future but I partially agree with Correct your spelling
technology
this
statement.
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, Technology
makes a
human life easier and these days Remove the article
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technology
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the internet
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saves
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expenses
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relationship
educator
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student
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students
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teacher always suggest
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classes
student
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students
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the computer
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kids will be more attentive as a human Fix the agreement mistake
sessions
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them.
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