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The tables below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in 2006.

The tables below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in 2006.
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The tables provide data about the
consumption
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 and
production
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 of
potatoes
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 in South and Central
America
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, Africa, North
America
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,
Europe
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 and
Asia
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 in 2006.
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, in 2006 the highest
consumption
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rate
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 of
potatoes
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had
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was in
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Europe
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,
whereas
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, the highest
production
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rate
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of
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potatoes
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had
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Asia
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. The highest
consumption
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rate
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 of
potatoes
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 in 2006
had
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Europe
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 with 96.1
kg
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 per
person
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. The
consumption
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 rates of
potatoes
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 in
Asia
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 and South and Central
America
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was
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 quite similar. The
consumption
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rate
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 of
potatoes
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 in
Asia
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 was 25,8
kg
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 per
person
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 and the
consumption
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rate
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 of
potatoes
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 in South and Central
America
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 was 23,6
kg
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 per
person
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. The lowest
consumption
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rate
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 of
potatoes
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 compared to others
had
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was in
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 Africa(14,1kg per
person
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) The highest
production
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rate
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 of
potatoes
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 in 2006
had
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Asia
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 with 131.2
million
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tonnes
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.
Europe
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 produced 126.3
million
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tonnes
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 of
potatoes
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 in 2006. North
America
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 produced 24.7
million
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tonnes
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 of
potatoes
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. Africa just produced 16.4
million
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tonnes
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 of
potatoes
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. The lowest
production
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rate
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 of
potatoes
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 in 2006
had
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was in
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 South and Central
America
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. The
production
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rate
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 was 15.6
million
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tonnes
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.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, production, potatoes, america, europe, asia, rate, kg, person, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provide" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Agricultural capacity
  • Dietary preferences
  • Cultural significance
  • Economic affordability
  • Trade policies
  • Food security
  • Production levels
  • Consumption patterns
  • Imbalance
  • Global agricultural trends
  • Technological advancements
  • Supply chain enhancements
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