The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The pie charts provide data about how working adults in a particular country spent their
time
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on different activities during weekdays in 1958 and 2008.
Overall
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, In both years, the main activities were working and sleeping. In 1958, adults devoted almost equal
time
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to working (33%) and sleeping (32%).
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, by 2008, the proportion of
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spent working increased to 42%,
whereas
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sleeping decreased by 8%. Notably, the
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spent going out saw a significant decline, dropping from 19% in 1958 to 6% in 2008. Over the 50-year period, there was an increase in the
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spent relaxing at home, it rose by 5% to reach 13% in 2008. Travelling to work
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showed a notable change, increasing from 2% in 1958 to 8% in 2008. The
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allocated to other interests or playing sports did not have
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change it had a minor change, going from 6% to 8% between 1958 and 2008.
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