The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words.
The pie charts illustrate the proportion of time spent by working adults
for
various activities in a specific nation with respect to two different years, 1958 and 2008.
Change preposition
on
Overall
, the percentage of total hours spent for working was
increased quite significantly over around 5 decades period. Unnecessary verb
apply
This
phenomenon seems to also
correlate with several other activities, such
as a dropped
in the proportion of time used for sleeping and going out with friends or family. Replace the word
drop
However
, other things that were routinely done were increased in terms of its percentage, like relaxing at home, travel
to work, and playing sports or other interests.
For more detailed information, the proportion of working rose from 33% in 1958 to 42% in 2008. Wrong verb form
travelling
In addition
to that, the percentage of young workers
time spent Change noun form
workers'
worker's
for
relaxing at home and Change preposition
apply
travel
to work Wrong verb form
travelling
also
grew. The former increased by 6% and the latter by 5% during 50 years
period examined. There Correct your spelling
the 50-year
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
also
a decreased
Replace the word
decrease
for
sleeping by 7 % and going out with family or friends by 13% respectively.Change preposition
in
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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