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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.
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The two pie charts illustrate the proportion of five types of
energy
production
 in France
by
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 the
year
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years
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 1995 and 2005.
Overall
, in both years, the main source
if
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of
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energy
production
 were gas and coal, which together accounted for over half the
productionof
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production of
energy
.
While
 nuclear and
other kind
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another kind
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 of
energy
generted
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generated
 the least amount of
energy
 in France.
Energy
 produced by gas
represent
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of
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29.63% in the first year and
this
 showed an
increases
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 to 30.31% in 2005.
Likewise
, in 1995, coal generated 29.80% which rose slightly to 30.1% 10 years later. With regards to the remaining methods of producing
energy
, there was an approximately 5% growth in
in
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the
production
 of both nuclear and other sources of
energy
 with 10.10% and 9.10% respectively. Petrol,
on the other hand
, was
only
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the only
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 source of
energy
 which decreased in
production
 from 29.27% in
1995to
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1995 to
 around a fifth (19.55%) in 2005.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, production with synonyms.
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