The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.
The two pie charts illustrate the proportion of five types of
energy
production
in France
by
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year
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1995 and 2005.
Overall
, in both years, the main source
if
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of
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energy
production
were gas and coal, which together accounted for over half the
productionof
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production of
energy
.
While
nuclear and
other kind
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of
energy
generted
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generated
the least amount of
energy
in France.
Energy
produced by gas
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of
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29.63% in the first year and
this
showed an
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to 30.31% in 2005.
Likewise
, in 1995, coal generated 29.80% which rose slightly to 30.1% 10 years later. With regards to the remaining methods of producing
energy
, there was an approximately 5% growth in
in
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the
production
of both nuclear and other sources of
energy
with 10.10% and 9.10% respectively. Petrol,
on the other hand
, was
only
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the only
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source of
energy
which decreased in
production
from 29.27% in
1995to
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1995 to
around a fifth (19.55%) in 2005.
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