The bar chart beow shows the percentage of Australian men and women in diffrent age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010,
Thw
graph illustrates the figures of Australian Correct your spelling
The
men
and womwn
doing regular physical activity in different Correct your spelling
women
age
groups
in 2010.
Overall
, it is evident that in all of the age
groups
except for 15 to 24, women
had more physical activities than men
. Besides
, elderlies'
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elderlies
men
and women
exercised almost equaly
in the same year.
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equally
First,
according to
the bar chart, Australian women
in age
groups
ranging from 45 to 54, 55 to 64 and 35 to 44 were the age
groups
with the highest rate in terms of doing phisical
activities with 53.3%, 53% and 52.5% respectively. Correct your spelling
physical
Then
, 48.9% of females Replace the word
aged
aging
between 25 to 34 did Replace the word
aged
Correct article usage
apply
the
regular exercise. Correct article usage
apply
Furthermore
, the female youngsters (aging
from 15 to 24) and the Replace the word
aged
women
in their sixties , exercised less than other age
groups
with 47.7% and 47.1% respectively.
On the other hand
, 52.8% of males had the highest rate of regular activities in the minimum age
ranges
. Fix the agreement mistake
range
In contrast
of
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to
women
in the range of 35 to 44 who workedout
roughly 53% on a regular basis, Correct your spelling
worked out
workout
men
had the lowest percentage of physical activity comparing
with all Wrong verb form
compared
age
groups
with 39.5%.Submitted by sarina.chenare78 on
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