The diagram shows how coffee is produced from beans.

#coffee #beans

the diagram gives us information about how

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coffee

has been

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produced from

beans

overall

it can be seen that there are ten stages in order to produce

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coffee

firstly

, people should pick the

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coffee

beans

from trees in the second step,

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the

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sunny days it has been dried under

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the sun

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sun shine

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thirdly

beans

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roasted in

special

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machin

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machine

machines

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cooks them quickly ,

then

they grind all

beans

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the beans

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and

mixed

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them in

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hot water

.after

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that

beans

steam the mixture and for the second

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beans

are

puting

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put

in the

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machine

to freeze .after having completed the freezing stage , they grind the frozen liquid ,

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and finaly

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finaly

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finally

,all

beans

dry in a vacuum ,now they are

ready

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ready for packing into jars and selling .

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The diagram shows how coffee is produced from beans.

Some believe that it is essential for teenagers to engage in voluntary activities during their leisure time to contribute to the well-being of the local community? Proponents argue that such a requirement would be advantageous for both the individual teenager and society in general.

Today, many people do not know their neighbors in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

In some countries, the role of a mother differs in some ways from the role of a father. Why do you think these differences exist? How might parental roles develop in the future?

Some people say that artists such as painters, writers and musicians affect our life more than scientists. TO what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your experience.