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The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The process demonstrates the way in which
aluminium
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cans
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 are recycled.
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, there are 6 steps in the process, beginning with gathering discharged
cans
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 and culminating in newly recycled
cans
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. In the first stage, consumed
cans
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 are collected from trash bins in preparation for the recycling procedure. Gathered
cans
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 are delivered to the processing factory in order to be washed, categorized, shredded and compressed into small portions.
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this
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 shedding and compressing phase, these
cans
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 are heated to extremely high temperatures and melted to form liquid
aluminium
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, preparing them for the following phases. In the next stage, the liquid undergoes a solidifying and flattening process to create individual rolls whose thickness ranges from 2.5 to 6mm. Having been shaped into a roll, the
cans
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 are utilised to produce new
aluminium
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cans
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 before they are ready to be reused. It is noticeable that recycled
cans
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 account for 74% of the total amount of
aluminium
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cans
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 in the UK.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words aluminium, cans with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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