The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The process demonstrates the way in which
aluminium
cans
are recycled.
Overall
, there are 6 steps in the process, beginning with gathering discharged
cans
and culminating in newly recycled
cans
. In the first stage, consumed
cans
are collected from trash bins in preparation for the recycling procedure. Gathered
cans
then
are delivered to the processing factory in order to be washed, categorized, shredded and compressed into small portions.
After
this
shedding and compressing phase, these
cans
are heated to extremely high temperatures and melted to form liquid
aluminium
, preparing them for the following phases. In the next stage, the liquid undergoes a solidifying and flattening process to create individual rolls whose thickness ranges from 2.5 to 6mm. Having been shaped into a roll, the
cans
are utilised to produce new
aluminium
cans
before they are ready to be reused. It is noticeable that recycled
cans
account for 74% of the total amount of
aluminium
cans
in the UK.
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