the maps below show the centre of samll town called Islip as it is now,and plans for its development. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

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Many people in poor countries die from diseases that are curable because they cannot afford the medication required. Do you believe that drug companies should make their products available at reduced prices in these countries?

Some people believe that to reduce industrial pollution, a tax should be imposed on companies, while others believe that different measures should be taken to solve the problem. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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