the maps below show the centre of samll town called Islip as it is now,and plans for its development. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
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These days the population of some
countries
(most countries
) includes a relatively large number
of young adults
, Compared with the number
of older people
. Most people
don
not want to have children. Correct your spelling
do
This
is possible for various reasons, including child care expensive
, deterioration of societies and other reasons. In Replace the word
expenses
this
essay, I will explore the adventages
and disadvantages of Correct your spelling
advantages
large
Change the article
a large
the large
number
of young adults
, Compared with the number
of older people
.
I will start by looking at the advantages. One of the important advantages of this
major is that older people
they
have more experience and they can help society and young Correct pronoun usage
apply
adults
. It can help governments
to run countries
.
Secondly
, young adults
can not run the startup and big business however
older people
can run the new startup because they have money and they can produce work. When produce
work, The economy grows, And Change the verb form
producing
countries
can become rich.
On the other hand
, The workforce will decrease, Because older people
after a
retirement age, can not work correctly and many jobs are lost. So Remove the article
apply
governments
need workforce
and are Correct article usage
a workforce
fored
to accept immigrants. Correct your spelling
forced
formed
This
may bring many social and economic damages, Such
as the loss of culture and inflation for the people
who live in that country.
Also
, If one country Add a missing verb
has the
the
large Change the article
a
number
of young adults
, Compared with the number
of older people
, governments
should spend more money for
insurance. Every Change preposition
on
people
when they reach retirement age, Fix the agreement mistake
person
need
insurance, And the duty of insurance and spending for the elderly is the responsibility of the Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
governments
.
Fix the agreement mistake
government
To
conclusion, It is not good for Change preposition
In
governments
that the number
of young adults
less than older people
. So government are trying to accept young immigrants to fill this
gap.Submitted by bahram.azizzade on
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