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the maps below show the centre of samll town called Islip as it is now,and plans for its development. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

the maps below show the centre of samll town called Islip as it is now,and plans for its development. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
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These days the population of some
countries
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 (most
countries
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) includes a relatively large
number
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 of young
adults
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, Compared with the
number
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 of older
people
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. Most
people
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don
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do
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 not want to have children.
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 is possible for various reasons, including child care
expensive
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expenses
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, deterioration of societies and other reasons. In
this
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 essay, I will explore the
adventages
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advantages
 and disadvantages of
large
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a large
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number
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 of young
adults
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, Compared with the
number
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 of older
people
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. I will start by looking at the advantages. One of the important advantages of
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 major is that older
people
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they
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apply
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have more experience and they can help society and young
adults
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. It can help
governments
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 to run
countries
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.
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, young
adults
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 can not run the startup and big business
however
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 older
people
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 can run the new startup because they have money and they can produce work. When
produce
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producing
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 work, The economy grows, And
countries
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 can become rich.
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, The workforce will decrease, Because older
people
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 after
a
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apply
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retirement age, can not work correctly and many jobs are lost. So
governments
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 need
workforce
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a workforce
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 and are
fored
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forced
formed
 to accept immigrants.
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 may bring many social and economic damages,
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 as the loss of culture and inflation for the
people
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 who live in that country.
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, If one country
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has the
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the
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a
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 large
number
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 of young
adults
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, Compared with the
number
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 of older
people
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,
governments
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 should spend more money
for
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on
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 insurance. Every
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people
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person
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 when they reach retirement age,
need
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needs
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 insurance, And the duty of insurance and spending for the elderly is the responsibility of the
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governments
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government
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.
To
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 conclusion, It is not good for
governments
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 that the
number
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 of young
adults
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 less than older
people
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. So government are trying to accept young immigrants to fill
this
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 gap.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, number, adults, people, governments with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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