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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
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The chart given illustrates, expenditures per week for 8
catagories
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categories
such
 as fuel,food,
housing
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and housing
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 in 1968 and 2018. The
unit
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units
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 are given by percentage.
Overall
, people spent most of their money
for
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on
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 nutrition in 1968, which
replaced
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was replaced
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 with leisure in 2018. Spending a lot of money on fuel and power was less popular for both years.
Firstly
,
persons
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people
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 spent about 35
percent
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per cent
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 of their income
for
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on
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 food in 1968, and it
was went
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went
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 down by twice in 2018.
Although
,
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apply
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 the figures for leisure time expenditures
was
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were
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 only 9
percent
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per cent
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 in 1968, it was
icreased
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increased
 about 2,5 times by 2018. As can be seen from
chart
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the chart
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, people spent less than 7
percent
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per cent
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 of their income
for
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on
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 fuel and power . It is
fact
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a fact
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 that
spendings
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spending
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 on household goods
was remain
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remained
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 the same
in
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between
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 1968 and 2018. Amounts for personal goods and clothing decreased 2 times.
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