The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
The
two
pie charts compare the percentages of students who were British at a specific university in England and spoke other
languages
besides
English in
two
different years, 2000 and 2010.
Overall
, Spanish was the biggest proportion in both years. Another
language
and
two
other
languages
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categories had increased,
while
no other
language
and French groups had decreased. German group,
however
, did not change and was the smallest
language
which British students were able to speak. There are broad
similarity
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similarities
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between Spanish, Another
language
, and
Two
other
languages
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language
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categories. The biggest percentage of
the
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British students could speak Spanish
in addition
to English in 2000, at 30%,
this
figure had increased to more than a third in 2010.
Similarly
, another
language
and
two
other
languages
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groups had raised 5% each, from 15 to 20
percent
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and from 10 to 15
percent
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, respectively.
By contrast
, the percentages of No other
languages
and French had fell. The former
was
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occupied the second position at a fifth in 2000 but decreased twofold in 2010. The latter,
also
, fell from 15% in 2000 to 10% in 2010. German
language
,
however
,
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the smallest percentage in both years.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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