The chart gives information about how much energy of different categories produced in France over the period of 5 years.

The chart gives information  about how much energy of different categories produced in France over the period of 5 years.
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The pie charts depict energy
production
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in
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five sources for five years into
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of times in France. The data has been calibrated in percentage.
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, the majority of the
production
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is
gas
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in both. The majority of the
production
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is
gas
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in both periods.
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, other was the least produced. First and foremost,
gas
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and cold took a large amount of a number of being produced in 1995 and 2005. Both were around 30% among other categories.
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, petro
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from 29% to 19%, which was the only category that was reduced. On the other, hand nuclear and other experience rose in 2005, the percentage of these categories went up to 10% and 9% respectively. To draw the conclusion, the only energy that fell was petro.
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, the energy that remained stable
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gas
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and coal. at the same time, the sources of nuclear and other went up
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words production, gas with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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