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The table shows the cost of water in 5 cities in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The table shows the cost of water in 5 cities in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
The table illustrates the water price in five
difference
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cities
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 in Australia, which consists of Adelaide, Brisbane, Melbourne, Perth and Sydney. The table shows in
dollars
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen from the table that usage
charges
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is
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 different between under and over 125
kilolitres
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.
Charges
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 with over 125
kilolitres
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usege
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 are the same or more than
charges
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 with under 125
kilolitres
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 usage, which
are depend
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 on the
cities
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. Comparing usage
charges
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 in
difference
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cities
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,
charges
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 in Melbourne and Sydney have the same rate applied to all users, not depending on
amount
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the amount
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 of used water, which is 0.81
dollars
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 and 0.98
dollars
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 per kilolitre respectively.
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, other
cities
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 charge users with higher
rate
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 when they use more than 125
kilolitres
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. Brisbane has the least
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, which is 0.03
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,
while
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 Perth has the most, which is 1.08
dollars
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. Considering
average
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the average
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 bill per household, all of the
cities
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 have almost the same cost, except Melbourne which has less bill than others around 60
dollars
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, dollars, charges, kilolitres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cost
  • water consumption
  • billing method
  • variation
  • historical trends
  • outlier
  • price range
  • anomalies
  • regional factor
  • summarise
  • identify
  • compare
  • expensive
  • least expensive
  • main features
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