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the line chart shows the results of survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

the line chart shows the results of survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The line graph provides data about the results of a survey and the reasons why individuals moved to the capital
city
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 of a particular country.
Overall
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, in all years the main reason why humans moved to the capital was
employment
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. As can be seen, in all years the main reason why humans moved to the capital was
employment
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. In 2000, 60000
people
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 moved to the capital because of the
employment
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. The figure of individuals who moved to the capital
due to
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employment
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 rose and its peak was in 2010
where
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when
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 more than 90000
people
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 moved to the
city
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 because of
the
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apply
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employment
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. In 2015 the
number
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 of
people
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 who moved to the
city
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 because of the
employment
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 was a little less than 90000.
Initially
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, roughly 25000
people
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 moved to the capital because of the study, the
number
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 of
people
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 who moved to the capital increased and in 2015 the
number
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 of
people
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 who moved to the capital was a little less than 90000 which was equal to the
number
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 of humans who moved to the
city
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 because of the
employment
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. In all years the least
number
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 of
people
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 who moved to the capital was because of friends/family and adventure.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, employment, people, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 12 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "a little less than" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line chart
  • survey
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • reasons
  • move/migration
  • capital city
  • fluctuations
  • significant spike/drop
  • comparison
  • predict
  • highlight
  • over time
  • period
  • development
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