The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
While
the chart above illustrates the
exports'
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value
of a country in five distinct
categories
over the period 2015 to 2016, the table demonstrates
the
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these percentage change in 2016. With an
overall
glance, it is evident that except
gems
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and
jewellery
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jewellery,
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the
value
of all of these
categories
were risen
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in 2016 and textiles was the category which has had the most rise. Petroleum
products
and engineered goods were the most valuable
categories
with the
value
of 60
billion
dollars
and 58
billion
dollars
respectively in 2015, followed by a slight increase in petroleum
products
(3 per
cen
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cent
)
as well as
engineered goods (8.5 per cent).
On the other hand
, the export
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in agricultural
products
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had a marked rise (15.24 per cent) and in agricultural
products
with a slight rise percentage of 0.81 were the other
categories
that increased gradually. Gems and jewellery had been the only category whose
value
dropped over the
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of
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time from 45
billion
dollars
to 40
billion
dollars
(5.18 per cent).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words value, categories, products, billion, dollars with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • trend analysis
  • anomalies
  • percentage change
  • sector analysis
  • global demand
  • domestic production
  • economic conditions
  • technological advancements
  • international regulations
  • economic growth
  • trade relations
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