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the charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisions where relevant.

the charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisions where relevant.
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The graphs below illustrate the percentage of
water
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 used for different goals in six zones of the world.
Overall
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, What stands out from the charts is that in all of the six areas, they had the lowest domestic
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 above the other purposes.
However
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, Europe and North America had the highest industrial
use
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, respectively. As we can see, agricultural
use
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 is more prevalent in Central
Asia
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 than in other continents. But Domestic
use
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 in Central
Asia
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 is the same as Southeast
Asia
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.
On the other hand
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, in Europe and North America, domestic
use
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 is almost equal to the Asian situation with a two
percent
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per cent
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 difference. If we check Africa’s
use
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 of
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, it can be seen that they are almost second after
Asia
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 in using
water
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 for industrial
use
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. As the chart shows, in
Asia
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 and Africa, the agricultural
use
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 of
water
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 is far more than in Europe and America, despite the fact that they
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 more
water
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 in industries and domestically.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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