The graph shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
the line graph depicts the shop closures and openings from 2011 to 2018. the data has been calibrated in thousands.
overall
, the shops which closed the most was
in 2015. Correct subject-verb agreement
were
however
, the releasing
of new shops that opened the most was Replace the word
release
2011
.
Change preposition
in 2011
to begin
with, in 2011 approximately 8500 new stores
had released. meanwhile, after a year only 4000 stores
had created
, which means only half of the amount of number in 2011. Add a missing verb
been created
moreover
, in the same years (2011 and 2012) stores
had to close were
about 6500 to 6000 respectively. Unnecessary verb
apply
in contrast
, in 2015 only 500 stores
experienced closure and 4000 new stores
opened. last
but not the
least, in the Correct article usage
apply
last
three years stores
that saw closing remained steady in
Change preposition
with
average
number of 5000. Change the article
an average
the average
furthermore
, the new stores
opened dropped to 3000.
to sum up
, in seven years there were bunch
of Add an article
a bunch
stores
experieced
open and close. the peak moment Correct your spelling
experienced
fo
openings was in 2011 or at the beginning of the period. Correct your spelling
for
on the other hand
, closures reached a peak in 2015 which was a great moment for the owners.Submitted by syifensaft
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words stores with synonyms.
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